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Hello, I'm Jade and I can't wait to review your poem Let's get started.

I once walked through an open door

To see what was inside
Interesting start, I like how door could almost be used as a metaphor, like an entrance to a world that feels so different, cruel, and inhumane. I don't know if that was what you were going for, but I like the start nonetheless!

I saw many terrified people who

Looked like they were trying to hide.

Oof, I can imagine the sad eyes and the quivering bodies. It pains me to think that but I have no problem with this part other than the flow feels a bit forced.

"Any Jews in there?", shouted

The regional German Police head.
I felt cold when I read that. It's sad, but you pictured it well. My only comment is the comma is unneeded in the first line, it makes it a teeny bit harder to read.

I was supposed to report back a "Yes"

But said "empty!" and walked out instead.
I'll admit this made me smile, a warm ending to such a sad, horrific poem. (As in the events, not your writing!)

OVERALL: I'm surprised about the emotional roller-coaster and I congratulate you on how well you captured this. I have no overall complaints and I hope you write more in the future! Have a great day!

Jade

The cruelty of humanity knows no bounds, but fortunately bravery, in the service of compassion is also present. The speaker, who might have been expected to obey either out of a sense of duty or fear, risked his own safety for the sake of others and it takes bravery to do that.

I like the casual way that you convey this fact in a kind of offhand casual conversational way. Makes the bravery in the face of potential harm stand out even more.

Thanks for sharing!

I meant this as a review. Well, there go my points! LOL

I love this poem.

It's so simple and short but communicates a clear message without dressing it up in fancy figurative language. The rhyming scheme is similar and adds a consistent flow to the entire piece.

I wish I could write more here (i normally do because, y'know, points...) but I can't.

as I said before, I love this poem

(P.S. Horrible Histories, is there anything better? well maybe this poem, but no)

Hey! Welcome to YWS . This is Theia here for a review.

Amazing work , I have to say . In a really long time , I haven't read anything like this. The imagery of the poem is amazing and it communicates the whole story really well. The imagery would also be my personal favorite feature of the work. I think you could work on the layout a bit , just a tiny bit.

"Any Jews in there?", shouted

You could make it "he shouted" followed by the line ahead . My favorite line is :

I was supposed to report back a "Yes"
But said "empty" and walked out instead.

This was truly amazing. You can make the rhyme scheme a little more consistent but it is okay if you don't do that. I hope you will post more amazing works like this.

Keep writing and welcome!!